Sunday Snippet: “The Berserker Rage released its hold on me.”

Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where authors post 8-10 sentences from their current, newly released, or upcoming work in progress. Still going through the first chapter of Storm of the Gods, the first book in my new and upcoming urban fantasy series (which is almost fully edited now, woo hoo!). Last time, Derek finished fighting the dracanae and notices that his brother lay unconscious on the ground. I should have clarified that in last week’s snippet: The boy lying on the ground is Derek’s brother, not a random person and not the dracanae in disguise. Sorry for any confusion! NOTE: Scene has been creatively edited to fit the sentence limit.

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I got to my feet and scampered to his side, dropped my knees onto the ground––

The Berserker Rage released its hold on me. The power that had energized me before gave way to catastrophic pain.

I collapsed next to my brother, my lungs seizing so badly that I couldn’t even scream. I had no magic left. I couldn’t heal Liam or myself until I rested and recharged. That wouldn’t happen for a few long, dreadful hours.

All I could do was lie in the dirt by my unmoving brother and feel the collection of agony ripping through my body. Scorch marks on my chest, stings from the acid-spell, an oozing pulse from my side, pounding in my head and back, raw and overworked muscles.

And then, as my mind replayed everything I had done, I felt the guilt.

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Amy

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28 Comments

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    Oh, one of the downfalls of the rage. Now, he is forced to deal with that guilt since he can’t do anything else.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Indeed! More to come!

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  2. Ed Hoornaert

    Ah, there’s some that’s immune to his berserker rage — guilt!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      It gets him every time! Haha

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  3. Christina Ochs

    These side effects are … interesting!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Indeed!

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  4. Aurora Springer

    Awful aftereffects. But, are they safe?

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Maybe… maybe not! 😉

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  5. Alexis Duran

    Well now I’m worried about those other bad guys that he was battling with before the monster broke loose. Derek and his brother are way too vulnerable right now. Way to keep the tension up!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  6. Teresa Cypher

    Wow… what a deeply emotional snippet. And so well-written!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  7. naomi shaw

    Great snippet. Full of emotion

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  8. Diane Burton

    Great job making the reader feel his emotions. Exhaustion and guilt. Terrible combination.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much!

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  9. veronicascott

    Wow, quite an aftereffect – I feel so badly for him. He pays the price for his powers. An intense snippet. Minor nit – the word ‘scampered’ took me out of the moment. It seems too light hearted for the gravity of this scene. Squirrels scamper…just a suggestion.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much, and I’ll do some more tweaks. 😉

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  10. Hywela Lyn

    No power comes without a cost – not in a good piece of writing anyway! Great job conveying the exhaustion, pain and guilt he’s feeling.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much!

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  11. elainecsc2013

    He isn’t a one dimensional character at all. Well done.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  12. Eden

    I sure hope there isn’t a lot of fighting still going on around them, because now his brother and he are both sitting ducks.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      We’ll see! 😀

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  13. Karen Michelle Nutt

    The guilt may be worse.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      It probably will be. 😉

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  14. Linda Hamonou

    That’s some bad case of withdrawal. I hope he snaps out of it fast because there seem to be still a lot going on.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      We’ll see!

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