Sunday Snippet: “My heart galloped a free, wild beat.”

Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where authors post 8-10 sentences from their current, newly released, or upcoming work in progress. Still going through the first chapter of Storm of the Gods, the first book in my new and upcoming urban fantasy series (which is almost fully edited now, woo hoo!). Last time, Derek was obliterating the dracanae, and now sees the consequences of his action… NOTE: Scene has been creatively edited to fit the sentence limit.

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Suddenly, the creature’s smoking, dead body pitched forward. I shoved it off me and breathed deep. Smells of dust, smoke, and blood twisted around me. Adrenaline fuelled my veins. My heart galloped a free, wild beat.

This, this, was what I lived for, what I was good at, what I did to keep––

My eyes snapped open, comprehension slicing through the battle-crazed fog of my thoughts. I turned—

And found the limp form of an eighteen-year old boy lying face first in the dirt just feet away from me.

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Amy

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36 Comments

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    Oh no! I’m sure his high at defeating the dracanae is gone now. An intriguing snippet!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Very likely! 😀

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  2. Teresa Cypher

    Oh wow. This scene has me asking so many questions. Outstanding description, Amy!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  3. Ed Hoornaert

    This kind of discovery sure can kill the mood. I wonder if he’ll feel guilty for the kid’s death.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      We’re not sure if he’s dead though! 😉

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  4. Elyzabeth M. VaLey

    Uh-oh. I wonder how he’s going to cope.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Probably not well haha

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  5. Aurora Springer

    Oops- was this kid the drananae? And where is his brother?

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Ah, the kid is his brother. I should have made that clearer. 😀

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  6. trincarl (@trincarl)

    Love the description of the creature!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  7. naomi shaw

    Oh no! Who’s the boy and is he okay? Great snippet Amy

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      The boy is his brother, and we’ll see if he’s all right in the next few snippets!

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  8. Veronica Scott

    Uh oh, he got distracted, not a good thing. Can’t wait to learn more! Great snippet, very cinematic.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  9. Alexis Duran

    My first thought was that the monster had possessed someone, then that it might be his brother. Either way, a definite buzz kill for Derek. But that’s probably good, or he’d get addicted to this power.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Indeed!

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  10. nancygideon

    Whoa! Great scene, Amy. From the uncontrolled high of victory to the fall of despair and consequence. Quite the breathless plunge!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  11. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Great emotional scene from high to low.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  12. Hywela Lyn

    Very emotional snippet – I wondered how he knew the boy was eighteen – but obviously if it’s his brother he knows. Perhaps ‘…the body of his eighteen year old brother’ would clarify it?

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      I think I fixed it in the edited text. I didn’t post the final version for the snippet. But I’ll be sure to double check! 😀

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  13. Caitlin Stern

    This is the cost of getting so focused — there were other dangers (including the ones menacing his brother). Now we see the consequences! o.O

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Exactly! Thanks!

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  14. elainecsc2013

    Was the boy the creature? That would put a new spin on things.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Hahaha I really should have gone with the finalized snippet. No, the kid is not the creature. 😉

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  15. chrisgrover

    This girl kills kids?

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Ummm… There’s currently no girl in this scene? And if you mean the POV character then, no he absolutely does not!!!

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  16. Jenna Jaxon

    Excellent snippet! Just when you think everything’s turning out ok, there’s an 18 year old kid down. I hope he’s not dead!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      We’ll see!

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  17. Diane Burton

    What?! Where did the kid come from? Boy, does this raise questions. great snippet.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Haha it’s my bad, I didn’t clarify that the kid is Derek’s brother. 😀

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  18. Siren X Star

    oh no! Wondering if he is going to feel guilty now?!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Yes! Haha Just a little. 🙂

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