Sunday Snippet: “My body heated with magic.”

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where authors post 8-10 sentences from their current, newly released, or upcoming work in progress. I’m still posting the first chapter of Storm of the Gods, the first book in my new and upcoming urban fantasy series. Last week, the folks fighting our main character Derek made a big mistake when they attacked Derek’s younger brother, Liam. They unleashed his Berserker Rage, the scariest power a war-scion possesses, and they’re about to realize the depth of their trouble (apologies for the swearing! :D)

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“Gage, what the fuck did you just do?” screamed the woman.

The dark-scion––Gage––sprinted toward the truck. His corrosive magic struck the doors and gouged them open. The dracaenae’s howls tore free.

In the background, the water-scion hovered near my brother’s prone form. She knelt down and hovered her hand above his chest, snowy magic drifting from her fingertips into his torso.

No no don’t you dare don’t touch him––

My body heated with magic.

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Oh boy, what’s he going to do?!

In other news, I’ve been working on the world-building for my NaNoWriMo project, since Storm of the Gods is with my editor and off my plate for the next week or so. I’ve been trying to find the best way to organize my thoughts and have everything in one place, having to choose from my chalkboard to notebooks to Scrivener. I think I’m going to stick with Scrivener and use my notebooks and board for other things, since the idea of typing actually doesn’t make my hand want to cramp up.

Since I’m working on the world-building and want it to be vast, I’m trying to make sure that nothing is missing. What do you think are some important elements of a story’s world?

Be sure to check out the other Weekend Writing Warriors blogs and websites for your fill of sci-fi, fantasy, romance, and awesome book deals! Until next time, cheers!

Amy

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42 Comments

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    I don’t think they’re going to be able to escape the rage. Nice snippet! 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Maybe… maybe not. 😉

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  2. Christina Ochs

    Leave us hanging, why doncha? I’m guessing his rage isn’t pretty. Though probably fun for us. 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Heh heh heh, yeah I do. 😀 And writing Derek in a Rage is sooooo much fun! 😀

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  3. nancygideon

    Yikes! So much action and tension. Great breath-suspending scene, Amy! Hope the edits go well. Can’t wait to read this.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you! It should be released next year. I’m going to be shopping around for a cover artist and prepping the release in December. Hopefully I remember how to do it all! Haha

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  4. veronicascott

    Enjoyed the excerpt – I’m sure when he does let go with the magic it’ll be stupendous!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      And terrifying! 😀

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  5. Alexis Duran

    If the monster and Derek’s rage are released at the same time–could get a tad messy. Great scene. As far as your question about world building goes, I love to know the history behind the current conflict, but then as I writer I tend to get wrapped up in the stories of those who went before, so that kind of development can be dangerous!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you! And I know what you mean. I already “know” the history (have to make a few tweaks), but now that I’ve got it planned out, all I can think is: 1.) I want to write those stories too, and 2.) these books are going to be soooo loooooong 😉

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  6. chrisgrover

    Interesting snippet.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you! 🙂

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  7. Aurora Springer

    What a long, drawn out triggered explosion!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Don’t worry––Derek will be up and moving soon enough! 😉

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  8. julieevelynjoyce

    Wow, action-packed scene! Great work, Amy! One thing I wanted to point out–you have the word ‘hovered’ twice and it reads as repetitive to me. Otherwise, this is excellent! 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much! Hopefully my editor will also notice that haha. Much appreciated!

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  9. Kimberly Gould

    Intense snippet! Leaves me on the edge of my seat.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Excellent! 🙂

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  10. racheldevineuk

    Your writing certainly packs a punch! Good writing for NaNoWriMo.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      I try! Haha And thank you! I’m getting really excited about this year. I’ll be creating an entirely new world that’s far more in depth than anything I’ve done before. Yay for challenges!

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  11. Andrea R Huelsenbeck

    Wow, tense! I want to know what happens next.
    And yeah, my unicorn book is actually the back story for the dragon book I was planning to write…

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks, and unicorns and dragons are amazing!

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  12. Jenna Jaxon

    Sounds like they are in a whole peck of trouble–to put it mildly. I don’t think they understand the ____storm that’s about to rain down one them. But it will be so fun to watch! Great snippet!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Haha Nope they don’t know yet. Thanks!

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  13. Maggie Bolitho

    Lovely language, great scene building. It’s very ‘more-ish.’

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  14. Hywela Lyn

    Wow, things are certainly ‘hotting’ up here, talk about dramatic!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Hahaha thank you!

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  15. elainecsc2013

    Great scene. So much tension.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  16. Diane Burton

    Uh oh. Real trouble is coming. Terrific snippet, Amy.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  17. Teresa Cypher

    You write such good action scenes, Amy!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much!

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  18. Caitlin Stern

    Sounds like Gage is going rogue. I think the water-scion might be trying to help, but I suspect she’s going to take a hit from a berserk cannonball instead.

    Oh, world building is one of my favorites! Obvious stuff like weather, land masses, flora and fauna, major points in history, races of people… I find the civilization’s laws really useful, too, and maybe some myths. Good luck on NaNo! 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Who knows? We’ll see what happens next! And I haven’t really looked at the laws yet, thank you! 😀

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  19. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Great action, but you left us hanging. lol I’m sure that was your point. 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Yes it was haha

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  20. Ed Hoornaert

    At last, a scene where the character feeling hot doesn’t arise from a splendid specimen of the opposite sex!
    Sorry for being late to comment. Blame *#@!@ LAX for getting me home a day late.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Hahaha!! Your comment was well worth the wait! 😀

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  21. Elyzabeth M. VaLey

    Uh-oh they better get out of the way! I can’t believe Nano is little more than a week away!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Gah! Don’t say that! I’m not ready! Haha

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