Sunday Snippet: “…I couldn’t show my back to a dark-scion.”

Welcome back to  Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where authors post 8-10 sentences from their current, newly released, or upcoming work in progress. Is everyone else melting from this heatwave? It’s going to be +30C over the next couple days, which in Fahrenheit means really damn hot. But I’m exceedingly well stocked on books, ice cream, and rewrites (more on that later), so let’s mosey on to this week’s Storm of the Gods snippet, which will start going out to literary agents tomorrow. Last week, Derek had learned his attacker was a dark-scion capable of controlling the dark fifth element, aether. As Derek faces off against his attacker, he wonders how his brother is faring via their telepathic link, the blood-bond (slightly modified to fit the 10 sentence limit)…

He shoved the dark sphere of magic at me. I leaned back and let it fly past me into the truck. The sphere exploded on impact, its smoky tendrils corroding the metal I’d been standing in front of moments ago.

I stepped back to get away from the truck, then heard shouts from behind me. From the corner of my eye, I could see a duo of black clad people––a bulky African American and a woman with the same masks as the dark-scion––run toward the vehicle. But I couldn’t see Liam engaging them, and I couldn’t show my back to a dark-scion.

<Ace, I can’t get to you yet, are you okay?>

<There’s a godsdamn water-scion fighting me and––>

Which meant he was okay, but when the African American and the woman reached him––

I whirled around, lashing out with my sword, which clashed with the sickle that had been cleaving toward my throat.

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Now, onto my little rewriting crisis. Oh, you’re not surprised I had another one? Me either! Here’s what happened: After scoping out the literary agents I want to email for Storm of the Gods, I started working on the rewrites of my YA fantasy novel, which some of you might remember was already going through a huge overhaul since I gender-swapped the two main characters. I worked through it for a little while, but it felt like I was just typing out words for the sake of typing out words. All of a sudden I had a thought about something in my plot, which lead to a spark/epiphany, which led to me stressing because this spark meant I had to rewrite the entire story from scratch. Again. Now, at first, I was pissed about this. I put so much work into the plot, the character interactions, the big maze they were going to do, everything. Over 100K words essentially wasted. But I couldn’t shake this spark from my head and it kept nagging me, so I figured I might as well see where it took me.

And I could not have been more glad that I did that.

Third time is definitely the charm, because I love this new story. Everything ties in perfectly, the stakes are massive, every character faces legitimate danger and no one is “useless,” the action is plentiful, there is lots of room to explore the world and history I created (though it needs some minor tweaks for the sake of the historical timeline), and most importantly, this feels like a “me” book. Not just one that I would write, but one that falls into the saying “write the book you want to read.” Yes, I have to start from scratch again (at time of posting this, I’m about halfway through Chapter 2), but I did the same with Storm, and rewriting it will likely be the best thing I ever did. That, and paint one of the walls in my condo with chalkboard paint. I started using that and it’s a godsend. I’d post a photo, but, well, all the spoilers are on that wall haha. Still, I cannot be more excited to start this new draft and see where it takes me. 

Be sure to check out the other Weekend Writing Warriors blogs and websites for your fill of sci-fi, fantasy, romance, and awesome book deals! Until next week!

Amy

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37 Comments

  1. Aurora Springer

    Aha – action at last. But isn’t he outnumbered?

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Neither Derek or Liam are, but who knows what the other two are up to? 😉

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  2. Author Jessica E. Subject

    A great action scene! I wonder what those other two characters are up to while the scions distract the brothers.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      You’ll have to wait and see! 😉

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  3. Author Charmaine Gordon

    Terrific and a bit poignant. Good writing, Amy.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  4. veronicascott

    Interesting snippet, lots of action!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  5. Jacob Rosemeier

    They just keep getting more and more intense! I think it’s awesome you realized that a rewrite for your novel was necessary. While it sounds like it’s going to take a while, like you said it’ll definitely be worth it in the end.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you, and I think the rewrites will be worth it in the end. I’m really liking this new storyline a lot more, but you’re right––it’s going to take a looooong time to finish haha.

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      1. Jacob Rosemeier

        Haha just keep thinking about how worth it it’ll be- you’ll thank yourself later for all the hard work, trust me!

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  6. daryldevore

    Good action scene and luckily for that last second turn around and stopped the scycle in time.
    Tweeted.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  7. Jenna Jaxon

    This has the look of an intense battle scene. Love the action! Congratulations on the rewrite. Sometimes it all falls into place just a little late, but better late than not at all. Good luck with your querying!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks, and I agree. I’m notorious for “completing” a story only to have to rewrite the whole thing again, haha.

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  8. Kimberly Gould

    High stakes! Great snippet.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  9. Alexis Duran

    Great snippet. I wonder if they’re going to let loose that monster in the back of the truck? I imagine that would be bad. Congrats on the epiphany. You’re a braver woman than I. I’ve been stalled forever because I can’t nail down one of my main characters. If I had to rewrite the whole thing, I think I’d run away screaming.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Maaaayyyybe… 😉 Writing is definitely a difficult and frustrating journey. Anyone who says otherwise has clearly never been committed to doing it! 🙂

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  10. Diane Burton

    Great fight sequence. Congrats on finding the spark for your story. Even though it means more work you’re happy with it and that’s what counts.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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  11. Ed Hoornaert

    You know, Amy, this is a comparison for the ages: rewritng is equivalent to painting a wall with chalkboard paint!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Haha you’re totally right!

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  12. nancygideon

    Don’t you just love it when that pesky inspiration gets in the way of a project that’s almost in the bag! Not. Until it makes it sooooo much better! Go with it, Amy! Great scene this week!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so much!

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  13. Andrea R Huelsenbeck

    Wow. These guys just get in deeper and deeper.
    Good luck with the rewrite. Ugh–the work! But oh, the results. Keep up the good work.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks so much!

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  14. elainecsc2013

    Excellent. Lots of tension and danger.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thanks!

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  15. Caitlin Stern

    I don’t think they’re nearly as in control of this situation as they think. This smells like a distraction!

    And a rewrite isn’t a waste, right? It’s practice!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Both very true! Thanks!

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  16. Hywela Lyn

    Good luck with the rewrite – been there and it is soul destroying – but so worth it in the end when you realise this was the story you were meant to write! Great action excerpt, very well written!

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Completely true haha. Thanks!

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  17. Teresa Cypher

    I am always in awe of how your action doesn’t overshadow the description, and how your great descriptive details don’t slow down the action.

    I think you puzzled out your rewriting crisis to a perfect answer. 🙂

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you so so much!

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  18. Sue Bar

    Great tension, Amy. Best of luck with the re-write.

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    1. amybraunauthor (Post author)

      Thank you!

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